About to start an inevitably failed attempt at writing a book (again)

Give us a think, this is the 1st few lines of my prologue



My name is Dragna Valentine. Until about 15 years ago I was, for lack of a better word, normal. I lived in a normal house with my normal family. I grew up in the suburbs of Sydney, Australia, a place which is now nothing but a radioactive pile of broken buildings and burnt corpses. My Mother, Sarah, would stay at home and look after my younger brother, Alex, and my two younger sisters, Emily and Susan, whilst my father, John, would spend most of his days at work. He was an independent safety inspector for one of Australia's main military weapons depots. It was a rare case that non-military personnel were aloud in a 10 mile radius of any military outlet let alone in one, but being childhood friends with Colonel Mike Stinson, the commander of the base, can get you into anything, they even got free drinks at the local pub for being servicemen, not that dad was ever in the military, but Mike would lie and tell the bartenders that he was. (missing some parts here until I think of a good lead up to this part )which became the United Earth Protectorate, a flimsy at best government that was created after the 4th world war.



All i have atm, got some dot points of where i want it to go but that's essentially it for now

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    DO EET.

    • Ertrov
    • January 3, 2012, 9:58 pm
    As long as I don't forget about it like the last ones I started, I plan to :)
    - Dragkyre January 3, 2012, 10:01 pm
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    Prologue is too detailed. Give background of the events of the story rather than the characters in the story. This is actually a good start to the first chapter.

    Yeah I was considering that, never really read prologues myself in books, probably won't use one and just do what you suggested and make it the 1st Chapter, because Half of the book is going to be the background of events up to a point then its going to go on after it reaches the present day (or thats the plan anyway)
    - Dragkyre January 3, 2012, 10:09 pm
    If this is going to be Chapter One, don't start off with "My name is...." Too cliche and it has been since Moby Dick. Use something creative, I'm sure you'll figure something out.
    - ghettoshen January 3, 2012, 10:16 pm
    Good point, thanks :)
    - Dragkyre January 3, 2012, 10:17 pm
    Was contemplating stating where the story will start off from after the backstory like "so here I am about to "insert something here" but again, been done
    - Dragkyre January 3, 2012, 10:17 pm
    Then again, what hasn't been done? My name is has been too done. I'm thinking start at the climax and explain situations leading up to it. Not sure if your story would fit that kind of structure but just throwing ideas out. Or maybe change from first person to third and start by describing the environment and then throw out the name. That's just my preference though, I hate writing in first person.
    - ghettoshen January 3, 2012, 10:22 pm
    Yeah, I'm sure I'll work something out, I've always liked climax starters, always makes me read on when done right, not like I have a dead line or anything plenty of time to work it out, even if i leave out the 1st paragraph for a while works
    - Dragkyre January 3, 2012, 10:23 pm
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